Some Days Are Harder Than Others
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Heartbroken
Feeling
A little blue
Slapped in the face,
Embarrassed to think
I was on a cloud
I was self-proud
For awhile
In a flash
Ever so quickly
I crashed and
Came tumbling down
Back to earth
Ouch! That hurt
Stand up again
Pick up the
Pieces what’re left
If any of
My own self-respect
This dream of mine
Will come true
I won’t give up
I refuse to
I’ll go on
I always do
Has this ever
Happened to you?
Sometimes it takes a friend or a new found acquaintance to point out flaws that we ourselves cannot see. This happened to me today, and I am grateful to this person in many ways. So even though this piece sounds terribly depressing, it isn’t so. For me it is just a learning process.
On A Brighter Note
- Poem The Beaver and the Moose
Children's story poem about how a beaver met a moose.
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I'm so glad I'm the one who wished you good luck and to not break a leg! You are correct it might hurt sometimes but if the person means well then it's A-OK. Great hub my friend:))
Audrey, Thank you and Welcome to HubPages.
Linda, You are the sunshine of my life...I know so many have already said that to you...I couldn't resist. Thanks for everything today.
Heeey Susan - this hub makes me sad:). Yes - you know this has happened to me - someone actually said I was LAME before - actually it was the first comment I ever got! But after I dusted myself off - I decided I wasn't gonna give up either. I'm glad because I met up with you!!
I am so glad you have Sunshine too:)
RH. Thanks, I am glad that you didn't give up and that we met here at HubVille!
I love all your poetry Susan, you are a very talented lady. Enjoyed the music and picture as well.
Hi Susan, I feel like that all the time and it's not depressing, you got up and brushed yourself off. Thanks for reminding us that all isn't lost.
It has happened to me. Nothing quite like it. Good job, Susan
I think most of us have felt that way at times and a friend to listen or talk to can make a huge difference. Our best lessons are learned through the painful experiences. Great hub.
I think wev'e all been there. All it takes is a few words from a friend to pick us up so that we can start again and not give up until we accomplish what we set out to do
Liked the poem
This is so very true! We may be embarrassed at the time, but we definitely learn from our mistakes, and that's what life is: a learning process! We become better through our experiences and stronger as well. I enjoyed this poem and voted "up"!
rebecca, That's such a nice compliment. Thank you.
Cardisa, James, Pam and Rosemay, Thank you all for reading and for all the comments. I appreciate them.
Beautiful poem, Susan. I thought you have great talent in creating wonderful poem like this one. I really love this poem. Well done and Rated up!
Prasetio
Susan well done girl this little ditty made my day as I sipped my morning coffee.
I love the broken structure of this poem. Beautiful!
time2write, Learning is what it's all about. Thanks so much.
Prasetio, Thanks so much my friend.
Dave, Glad to hear that and thank you.
Snurre, Thank you.
I think every writer - actually every person - has these experiences, and as your poem says the trick is to not give up. It’s great that you could end up feeling grateful to the person, that’s how we grow as writers and as people isn’t it?
I agree with Snurre that the broken structure works well with the words.
Thanks for this hub.
You see the silver lining ~ Well Done !
Again, nicely done - always a message to convey.
I almost didn't read this because I've had many hard days recently. I am so happy I did stop to read especially your explanation at the end..."sometimes it takes a friend". I also had comments to come from people who are not friends and who didn't mean me good, but they made me stop and reflect. However today, you are that friend for me and I thank you very much for sharing this. Really helped. Voted up.
A wonderful poem and your words are true. When we are first told about our flaws, it can seem like the end of the world and that we'll never get over it. But we do, and more often than not, when we rectify these flaws, it is such a liberating experience.
Wonderful hub + voted up awesome!!
Well said. It's always darkest before the dawn. It's what we see with our inside vision that counts. Keep dreaming.
Voted up.
Melovy, Exactly the message I was trying to get across. Thanks for commenting and reading.
Barry, There is a silver lining. Thank you.
carco, Thank you.
Dee, I am sorry to hear that you're having some hard days but glad that this poem has helped you.
Seeker, Sometimes it's a good thing to have our flaws pointed out to us. Thanks so much.
dreamingfitness, Thank you.
There is always the light at the end of the tunnel....I feel it getting through in your beautiful poem...thank you for a great read:)
Susan, I thank God every day for a good friend and especially my Sis. Mary. I can be down and she knows how to bring me back. I'm happy you feel better..Enjoyed your poem..Well done..Cheers
It's always a pleasure to learn about self more than one has already realized. Since it came from someone else and not you learning it yourself, then the fall had to hurt quite a bit. I'm glad you were able to see it for what the person was saying, because it shows you can recognize truth when it's laid at your feet. Nicely written. :)
What a powerful piece... and a good lesson to be learned. Sure, life can get hard, but it takes a strong person to stand up, brush off the dust and carry on. Absolutley loved this!
Life I find lately is full of Surprises...and disappointments. I could certainly relate to your Wonderful Poem Susan...You told it like it is...As long as we're able to see the "Sunshine" of the next day.
Beautifully phrased. Voted up.
Beautiful hub on being human and learning from our mistakes. Love that you trust your friend so much!
Way to go, Susan! I'm proud of you.
Susan - I join the chorus above Well Done!
Wonderful poem susan, I could so relate to this.
Thank you.
Beata & Ruby, Thank you glad you liked the poem.
Cags, I always try to look at things from many different angles, especially criticism. There's always something to be learned. Thanks for commenting, I really appreciate it.
barbergirl, b. malin, Kulsum, Steph, Bill, Hmrjmr & MM,
Thank you all, I wasn't really expecting so many wonderful comments on this piece.
Wow ! Thanks , awesome and caught by surprise with this one, this I believe is what truth feels like, and I did expect to find lots of it here on HP.
Got my moneys worth with this one.
Both with your choice of music and in your poem .
Hits hard.Hope I can read another tonight , but I 'll comment tomorrow.
Either laugh with the realization of truth or cry as you celebrate finding it.
Thanks for sharing .Wow
Blessings.
Sky, Thank you for reading and for all your comments. I appreciate them.
Great poem. It delivers a message to forge ahead and never give up on our dreams.
Sue, Thanks...my motto "never give up never give in" :)
Such a lovely, honest poem. I have been there. It stings but if you know the person cares, it's a chance to grow. Thanks for sharing -- it helps us all be more honest! Take care.
praireprincess, Glad you liked it and thank you.
Now I found something in your writing of poetry something that hasn't truly occurred to me before. I always tend to use a great deal of words to express something, you expressed a great deal of things with very little words or effort, but at the same time it takes a great deal of thought power to pull something of this magnitude together.
A masterpiece is what I just read here, & I'm not blowing smoke at you, because I been writing and reading poetry all my life since a child in grade school. With all that experience behind my belt I do find your grip on words is much deeper than most writers for sure, maybe its your personality or perspective view on reality, but whatever it is you got a gift with words that's profound to say the least, because this is hard to do, what you've just done with this beautiful hub, its short its sweet and to the point.
I don't know how you do this, but if you started a writing/creative writing class or school, I would definitely attend and be at the front seat of the class, just to absorb your teaching. Voted Up on all levels, Wow I'm coming back to read it again, and I'll watch the video next time as well.
CloudExplorer, Oh my goodness...I am not sure what to say, except thank you so much. This has to be the most wonderful comment and best compliment I've ever received. Thank you so much!
Hi Susan,
I can easily get very defensive when someone points something out to me. My best friend does this often and I have to remind myself that it is never her intent to hurt me. She's cares and is looking out for me. But, as you say "some days are harder than others."
Sharyn
Sharyn, I too get defensive but then I step back and think about what has been said to me. Many times I see where the other person is coming from and end up agreeing with them. Thanks for reading and your comments are always very appreciated.
AudreyHowitt Level 7 Commenter 6 months ago
So true--especially your last stanza! Beautifully done!